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Responses:
- From: chandy (@ 209.125.83.228)
on: Wed Apr 21 15:43:16
Shiva :
Nice one! kumudam 1-pakka-kadhai style-la iruku. Somehow, the end twist was apparent right from the begining of the story :)
- From: shiva (@ user.pghlogistics.com)
on: Wed Apr 21 15:49:59
thanx chandy!!
neenga neraya kathai padikkireengannu nenaikkiraen...athunaalathaan 'end'aa 'guess' pannidureenga:-)
aana konjam yaemaathalaamnu thaan naduvula sundar character'a kondu vanthaen..adhu kooda unga 'guess' aa maaththalaiyaa:-(
- From: bb (@ schubert.crhc.uiuc.edu)
on: Wed Apr 21 15:54:21
yes, shiva, indha "paraN", "nagam" padichchavudanE idhu tom and jerry kadhai thaannu therinjupOchchu:-)))))
- From: shiva (@ user.pghlogistics.com)
on: Wed Apr 21 15:56:55
achchachchoa bb!!therinjirunthaa vaera ethaavathu substitutes poatruppaenae...
inimae en kathaiyellaaam ungalukku anuppi oru review nadathittu apram hub la podaraen..enna ungalukku ok vaa? :-)
- From: shiva (@ user.pghlogistics.com)
on: Wed Apr 21 15:58:55
apram bb..yaen explicit aa comments 'la "ATHA" ezuthineengaa...yaarvathu comments padichchittu story padichchaaa...oruththaraiyaavathu yaemaaththalaamnnu paakkaraen bb ;-)..oru nappaasathaan vaera onummilla...
- From: NOV (@ 202.184.134.8)
on: Wed Apr 21 21:20:22
Shiva - Sorry. Naanum eimaravillai. :-)))
- From: bb (@ franck.crhc.uiuc.edu)
on: Thu Apr 22 02:52:22
shiva, the problem is that we are a generation brought up on the one page stories of kumudam and vikatan..... kumudaththile varra 6 vidhdhiyaasangaL padaththile engE pOttiruppaangannu kooda ennaala accurateA guess paNNa mudiyum:-))))))
- From: Sun (@ 192.149.1.168)
on: Thu Apr 22 09:41:48
Shiva,
It is quite apparent that "I" was an animal.
What you really need is a back twist. The
twist could be that "I" was actually a man killing
a dog that turned rabid or a hunter wiping out
a pack of wolves. Or even a macabre dark comedy
of really a man killing another and and end note
saying, "you expected a cat to kill mouse didn't ya? fooled ya".
(BTW if people have read this much of comments
it is far too late to protect the punch line.)
- From: shiva (@ user.pghlogistics.com)
on: Thu Apr 22 10:09:25
NOV: :-( aduththa vaatti kandippa yaemaaththuraen...
atleat naan yaemaaththuvaen nnu nenachchaavathu neenga yaemaanthu poaganum...:-)
- From: shiva (@ user.pghlogistics.com)
on: Thu Apr 22 10:16:09
Sun: thanx for your good suggestions...:-)
i think certain words like "paran", "pathungi", "nagam", "pal"..etc made it obvious..
btb, my intention was to make readers imagine a psycho serial killer which turns out to be a cat..but apparently i failed...:-(
the basic point is, when i wrote this story i was actually imagining a cat narrating...instead i shud have imagined a man narrating and turned the last sentence to the cat...appa maybe konjam realistic aa irunthirukkalaam...:-)
aana inga irukkara readers'llam bayangara "sharp"u...yaemaatharathu konjam kashtamthaan...
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