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- From: pae (@ global25.citicorp.com)
on: Wed Jan 20 10:40:26
PARTY. Idhu oru Kurunkadhai.
Indru Raghavanukku avan Manager tharum party. Romba muyarchi seidu oru periya order-i than company-kku vaangi koduththuvittan Raghavan.
Oru vaaram munbae, avan Manager sollivittar, family-odu, nagarathin andha brimmanda hotel-luku sariya 7:00 manikku vara vaendum endru.
Innum Shailajavai kanome. Satish-i school-l irundhu kooti varugiraen endru pona, indha Raniyayum kanome. Ivargalukkaga wait panni,
wait panni, Raghavanukku thalai valiyae varum pol irundhathu.
Veruththu poi, moondravthu cigarette-i pattra vaika pogum podhu, Shailaja avasaram avasaramaaga veetirkkul nuzhaindaal.
"aen Shailaja ivvalavu late ? Naan nethae sonnanlae, innikku konjam seekirama vandhudunu" endraan, shovukku lace kattikondae Raghavan.
"innikku aedo oorvalamnu, bus-i sutthu vazhila vittan. adhan late"
"sari, sari anga party-kku late aagudhu...."
"idho oru nimisham" endru alariya padiyae, ullae sendral Shailaja.
"Shaila, nee varra vazhilae Raniyai paathiyaa"
"illayae. aen kaekareenga "
"Rani, Satish-i school-laendu kootitu vandhurraenttu pona,adhan kaetaen"
"poyi romba naeramaccha", adukkalai ullae irundu kaettal Shailaja.
"aama, poyi oru mukkal mani neram aachu. naan vena poyi patthuttu varattuma?"
"sari, neenga varra samayathila, bathroomla irundhaalum iruppaen, veliyilae kadhavai pootitu poyittu vaanga" endral Shailaja.
Sathish vandhu avanai kilappi, 7 manikkulae... indraikku aedo oorvalamnu Shailu sonna. Traffic. Che. Veliyil vandhu Car-i kilappinaan.
Adhu mattum avan manasukkul pulambuvadhai aamoditthu, 'brrrr' endra satththathudan udane kilambiyathu.
Paathi dhooram pogumpodhae, edhiril Rani, Sathishudan varuvadhai paarthaan. Avargalai car-il aetrikondu thirumbavum veedu vandhaan.
Khadhavai thirandhu kondu ullae nuzhayavum, Shailaja purappada thayaaraga nindraal.
"Shailu, Satish-i seekiram kilappu" endraan Raghavan.
Shailu avanai kootikondu poga, Rani adukkalai paathirangalai ozhunga seyya ullae ponal.
Siridhu nerathirkku pin, Satish-i nangu dress panni kooti vandhaal Shailaja.
"OK, purappadalaama", Raghavan ullae paarthu kural koduththaan. Rani hallukku vandhaal.
"Aenga, innikku aedo oorvalamaam. bus-la pona romba late aagumgira,indha velai kaara ponnu. aapadiyae, avalai ava veedu irukkum theruvil
vittutu, naama pogalama"
"appadiyae, pannalaam, Rani", endraan Raghavan.
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- From: balaji (@ schubert.crhc.uiuc.edu)
on: Wed Jan 20 23:38:36
Note: please read the following story and see the contrast in mood between the two stories. That is the only objective. vEra onnum illai.
the portions that i have changed are in italics..note how the whole dimension of the story changes with just a few lines changed.
PARTY. Idhu oru Kurunkadhai.
Indru Raghavanukku avan Manager tharum party. Romba muyarchi seidu oru periya order-i than company-kku vaangi koduththuvittan Raghavan.
Oru vaaram munbae, avan Manager sollivittar, family-odu, nagarathin andha brimmanda hotel-luku sariya 7:00 manikku vara vaendum endru.
Innum Shailajavai kanome. Satish-i school-l irundhu kooti varugiraen endru pona, indha Raniyayum kanome. Ivargalukkaga wait panni, wait panni, Raghavanukku thalai valiyae varum pol irundhathu.
Veruththu poi, moondravthu cigarette-i pattra vaika pogum podhu, Shailaja avasaram avasaramaaga veetirkkul nuzhaindaal.
"aen Shailaja ivvalavu late ? Naan nethae sonnanlae, innikku konjam seekirama vandhudunu" endraan, shovukku lace kattikondae Raghavan.
"innikku aedo oorvalamnu, bus-i sutthu vazhila vittan. adhan late"
"sari, sari anga party-kku late aagudhu...."
"idho oru nimisham" endru alariya padiyae, ullae sendral Shailaja.
"Shaila, nee varra vazhilae Raniyai paathiyaa"
"illayae. aen kaekareenga "
"Rani, Satish-i school-laendu kootitu vandhurraenttu pona,adhan kaetaen"
"poyi romba naeramaccha", adukkalai ullae irundu kaettal Shailaja.
"aama, poyi oru mukkal mani neram aachu. naan vena poyi patthuttu varattuma?"
"sari, neenga varra samayathila, bathroomla irundhaalum iruppaen, veliyilae kadhavai pootitu poyittu vaanga" endral Shailaja.
Sathish vandhu avanai kilappi, 7 manikkulae... indraikku aedo oorvalamnu Shailu sonna. Traffic. Che. Veliyil vandhu Car-i kilappinaan.
Adhu mattum avan manasukkul pulambuvadhai aamoditthu, 'brrrr' endra satththathudan udane kilambiyathu.
Paathi dhooram pogumpodhae, edhiril Sathish avan vaguppu aasiriyaiyudan varuvadhai paarthaan.
"avanai kooppida varra ponnu varallai, azhudhundirundhaan..ice cream vaangi kuduththu naan konduvidalaamnnu vandhEn"
"thanks, madam. ennadaa, ippo azhugai pOchchA" endru kooriyapadiyE, sathishaith than vandiyil ERRikkoNdAn.
rani engu senRAL endru theriyaadhadhaal, schoolkkup pOip paakkalaam endru sendraan.
nadu vazhiyil, saalai naduvil koottam. arugil sendru car kannAdiyai iRakkip paarththaan.
"chinnap ponnu saar, Edho kasumaalam idichchittu nikkaama pOyittaan", beediyaip paRRavaiththukkondE arugil irundha richshawkaaran sonnAn.
car-ai Oramaaga niruththi koottathai vilakki sendru paarththaan. rani, thalaiyil adipattu kidandhAL, eekkaL moikka. uyir pOyirukkum.
oru nimidam veRiththu paarththa Raghavan, carukku thirumbi vandhu, OsaiyillAmal veettukku vandhaan.
Khadhavai thirandhu kondu ullae nuzhayavum, Shailaja purappada thayaaraga nindraal.
"Shailu, Satish-i seekiram kilappu" endraan Raghavan.
Siridhu nerathirkku pin, Satish-i nangu dress panni kooti vandhaal Shailaja.
"Amaam, rani engE?"
"theriyallai, andhak kazhudhai engEyaavadhu cinema poster paathundu irukkum, illai yaaraavadhu herione aakkarEnnu kooppittiruppaanga, iLichindu pOyirukkum..vidu, thaanaa varuvaa, varaattip pORA"
"sari, sari kelambunga", endraan Raghavan, "party late aagap pOgudhu."
- From: balaji (@ schubert.crhc.uiuc.edu)
on: Thu Jan 21 00:22:01
ramki tells me that this one is similar to a story by vasanthi in vikatan 8-9 years ago. enakku theriyaadhu andhak kadhaip paththi.
- From: Ramji (@ 205.177.170.80)
on: Thu Jan 21 08:52:06
balaji(pae):
Interesting and imaginative. Was reminded of Sujatha's early attempts at new patterns of story telling. Can not remember the title,there was a short story with a revolving endless loop. At the end of the last page, it said "go back and continue from first page". I have not read Vasanthi's story. In fact I have hardly read Tamil magazines after moving to USA in 1986.
- From: pae (@ globalb25.citicorp.com)
on: Thu Jan 21 09:25:15
balaji, nice alteration. In fact I thought along your lines, while developing the story, but feared to do so, simply because I don't want comments from readers that it is Sujatha's style.
If my story resembles Vasanthi's, then it is only a coincident. NO PLAGIARISM.
Ramji, thanks for your encouraging comments. As this is my second story I cannot avoid Sujatha's method of writing as he has created lot of impact in me.
- From: TSR (@ spider-wd023.proxy.aol.com)
on: Wed Jan 27 19:48:37
pae, nice story.
- From: sps (@ semiramis.erlm.siemens.de)
on: Fri Jan 29 01:22:57
pae: A nice story telling techinique. Easily comes under the category "thooNdil kathaigaL" : A series of short stories written by sujatha, which had this "last line turn" technique as the theme for story telling technique.
balaji's modification: good attempt and changes the moodset of the story entirly. Reminded me following short stories of sujatha, "sasi kaaththirukkiraaL" and "nijaththai thEdi" [2nd one is available in the net : www.clicksujatha.com]
Ramji: I think you were mentioning 'mannikkavum, ithu kathiayin aarambamalla".. Its based on the mathematical mobies strip concet. That story startes & finishes [but doesnt end!] with the word "ditto".. and gets into an infinite loop.
DIGRESSION: ;))
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Regarding mobies strip: take a small strip of paper and give half twist to it and join (using a glue) the edges of the strip. It will have only one side (try coloring!) and if you cut along the middle of the strip along the length side, u will get two similar strips.
- From: sps (@ ramses.erlm.siemens.de)
on: Fri Jan 29 01:31:21
pae: I cannot avoid Sujatha's method of writing as he has created lot of impact in me. ... neengaLum namba case thaanaa? ;)) offlate, I was coming to only two different conclusions regarding any new writter:
1. neenga sujathaa maathiriyE ezhuthareenga!
2. neenga sujthaa maathiri ezhuthalai!
His impact on generations of 1975-90 is unavoidable, I feel.
- From: pae (@ globalb25.citicorp.com)
on: Fri Jan 29 10:32:57
sps, thanks. You are absolutely right about the new writers.
- From: Sorry (@ )
on: Thu May 3 13:19:46
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- From: Preethi Ryan (@ )
on: Thu Mar 6 01:25:02
Sujatha Short Stories - as electronic books !!
You can download great Tamil short stories as electronic books from Sulekha.com
They have Sujatha Stories at this link:
http://www.sulekha.com/epress/listbooks.asp?cat=Fiction+%96+Tamil&ref=tfm
Several of them are nice and cost from $0.99 to $5.00
In particular there is a story by Sujatha written for Maniratnam's Kannathil Muthamittal.
This is an awesome story that is picturised in a nice fashion by Maniratnam in Kannathil Muthamittal.
That is available in this URL:
http://www.sulekha.com/epress/ebookdetail.asp?cid=EB_SUJATHA_B002&ref=tfm
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