Kanavugal (NS)
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Responses:
- From: pae (@ globalb25.citicorp.com)
on: Mon Apr 12 16:32:52
NS: Irandhu ponathu Chandruvaa ? Dhamuvaa ? Confusion in the last para. Kanavugal - edhai pattri ?
- From: NS (@ ppp-88-ts52.nerdc.ufl.edu)
on: Mon Apr 12 19:39:31
Pae: Damu is the dead guy. OK, let me try to explain: Till the last 2 lines I guess things are clear. Now, a linear way to end this story would have been this: Chandru's mom asking him whether he is staying over till they 'eduthufy' and chandru replying that he has an inspection in his office and so has to leave early. Now, look at the last two lines in the story again and u'll see
the same idea but with Damu in place of Chandru. So that leads me to the point I am trying to make: Chandru in some sense is living the life of Damu and is having experiences which Damu might have had at some point of time, years ago. He has his own version of Damu's dreams. They may or may not be fulfilled. that's what i wanted to convey.
Thanks for asking.
- From: babu (@ 198.153.135.42)
on: Mon Apr 12 20:37:29
a very good one NS, after a long time, suththa brahmin language pesina maathiri oru thirupthi. kathai nalla ethArththam. Congrats. And thanks for the above explanation.
- From: Ramki (@ pm062-14.spindler.wmich.edu)
on: Tue Apr 13 00:15:10
NS kadhai west mambalathile engae roadle nadakkire madhiri oru feeling create pannithu-nice
- From: Kanchana (@ spider-ta071.proxy.aol.com)
on: Tue Apr 13 09:36:38
NS, nice to see a non-linear presentation. Different. Look forward to more.
- From: aruLarasan (@ psiphi.umsl.edu)
on: Tue Apr 13 11:26:37
NS,
i still cannot understand the non-linearity in the story.
so, except for the end, the story flows smoothly and highly readable. keep posting more.
- From: Sun aka sooriyan (@ 192.149.1.168)
on: Tue Apr 13 15:57:52
NS,
The narrations was simple and crystal clear. I sensed chandru living damu's life all the way through. The idea would have been more clearly
expressed if the last line went something like,
"Endaa En ivvaLvu late? chandru maamaa pOyttaardaa"
Anyway a very good story and narration. Keep it up.
- From: Gokul (@ gatekeeper.ohioedison.com)
on: Tue Apr 13 18:08:03
NS, The narration is good and welcome to the Hub.
I too miss the non-linearity in the story.
- From: NS (@ ppp-17-ts52.nerdc.ufl.edu)
on: Tue Apr 13 23:07:50
Thanks Babu, Ramki, kanchana, AruLarasan, Sun and Gokul.
I started to explain the last two lines once more and found that I was repeating my earlier explanation. But I had this weird imagination suddenly. Here it goes: Imagine this story was a 20 minute tv drama and Damu is played by G.R.Srinivasan and Chandru is played by Master Shekar. Master Shekar comes out to pick up the newspaper and makes the aforementioned observation and the scene dissolves and in the next scene GRS with an ill-fitting wig and dressed like a youth comes out with a cycle and the last two lines are acted out...
I guess I tried too much on my maiden venture. Once again thanx for the nice words and will try to come up with more.
- From: shiva (@ user.pghlogistics.com)
on: Wed Apr 14 08:52:44
NS:
Good effort!
Neat narration, yet the end perplexed me.
keep writing.
- From: Udhaya (@ 205.218.142.217)
on: Wed Apr 14 17:14:28
NS,
Good, concise narration. Dhamu lives and breathes through Chandru's recollection. Juxtaposing two characters is a good tactic but it's easier to handle in a visual medium than in fiction. As it's used here, I'm indifferent to the tactic since the point is already evident when in the end duty calls Chandru and he's indebted to it. Still, I encourage your experimentation in storytelling.
- From: Prais (@ cpe0080c6fdfe26-cm014110219722.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com)
on: Mon Jun 16 19:11:30
interesting to read
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