Topic started by Abiramee (@ 202.188.127.2) on Wed Apr 17 03:34:58 .
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poovinai thendatha thenikkal illai
naan unnai ninaikkhatha nadkale illai
oviyan varnanggalai varnikkatha naal illai
naan unnai varnikkatha nerame illai.

kanngal unnai thedugirathe
kathugal un penchai ethirpakirathe
kalgal un thisayai nokkirathe
en uyiro un anbu engge kedkirathe..

unnai partha neram
naan en urakathai maranthen
un enbamana nadpukkaga
naan eraivanai tholuthen

un enbamana mugathai parthen
naan en thunba mugavariyai maranthen
un sollai kethen
sonthathai maranthen
un ennathai kethen
naan ennaye maranthen

oru madal eluthenen en manathai anuppinen
oru kavithai eluthenen en kanavai anuppinen
athil en ennathai eluthinen
naan enneye anuppinen

from,
gana

Responses:

• From: Abie (@ 202.188.127.2) on: Wed Apr 17 03:35:47
  
  Thaya,
  
  Hope to hear ur comment here.
  Thankz.
  
  
• From: Thaya. (@ 206-47-144-49.ip.tor.radiant.net) on: Wed Apr 17 11:25:57
  
  
  Nice Abirami.
  The high lighted lines are...
  "sollai kethen
  sonthathai maranthen"
  Nice lines.
  
  I think,
  if you edit the words as les as posible,it will make point stronger.
  an other words.....
  The idea=suger.
  the words=water.
  
  If you add too much water,it will give only light tase.
  less water more sweet.
  purinchuthaa?:)
  
  I am just sharing what i think is better.
  you still have to get others ideas too.:)
  
  
• From: Abiramee (@ 202.188.127.2) on: Wed Apr 17 22:22:16
  
  Thankz thaya,
  
  What u have said is right.
  The more word we use it make it more bored.
  Short poem are nicer then poems that use long words.
  
  

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