Topic started by Thaya (@ 192.30.226.29) on Fri Apr 12 18:04:21 .
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Hey just a kavithai.It's not true anymore.


Etharkaaha mounam?
Maranam tharuhiraayaa?
Vaarthaihal veesi
Vanmurai sethaalenna?

Vanthanaal thoddu
Vaanam paakka vaikkiraai.!
Boomi paarthu nikkiraai!

Udambaaha maddum
Ulaham vantha pinnaal...
Uyirodu sernthathu
Unnai paartha pinnaal.!
Unakku ithu theriyaathaa?
Unmayaaha theriyaathaa?

Pirkaalam namakku
Porkaalam endru
Padaithavan sonnathillayaa?

Unakkaaha maddum
Udainthu pohum ullam
Unnai illai enraal
Urangi povathenna?

Unakkum enakkum
Uruvam thantha pinnaal...
Uravil maddum
Oonam seithathethanaal?

Responses:

• From: Thinker (@ bangdp-38-68.mantraonline.com) on: Sat Apr 13 06:48:21
  
  Thaya,
  
  "Padaithavan sonnathillayaa? "<<
  
  sonnadillaiya? can be replaced with much better shudh tamizh word.
  
  "Unnai illai enraal
  Urangi povathenna? "<<<
  
  Nee illai endral.....unnai illai..is grammatical error allava?
  or if u are keen on rhyming..
  
  "un uravillai endral"
  
  Next para...
  "Uravil maddum
  Oonam seithathethanaal? "<<<
  
  seidadenna?
  endru muditirundaal...last two paras would rhyme.
  
  i.e....it can appear as follows.
  
  " Unakkaaha maddum
  Udainthu pohum ullam
  Un uravillai enraal
  Urangi povathenna?
  
  Unakkum enakkum
  Uruvam thantha pinnaal...
  Uravil maddum
  Oonam seidadenna?"
  
  The poem over all is a Good poem.
  
  
• From: Thaya (@ toronto-ppp3537454.sympatico.ca) on: Sat Apr 13 16:05:54
  
  Sonnnathillayaa.....
  i don't see whats wrong with that wording.
  If not it differs in meaning from your view.
  what i mean is...
  
  "Pesuthal"
  Indian.....urayaaduthal.
  Srilankan.....Thidduthal.
  
  "Kathaiththal"
  Indian.....Thidduthal or gossiping
  Srilankan.....Urayaaduthal.
  
  Oh by the way...I am from Srilanka.but studied in madras.
  
  "Nee illai endral.....unnai illai..is grammatical error allava?"
  
  Nee.....You.
  Unnai.....expected to give the meaning"everything about you"
  i think unnai is more effective than nee.and also rhyming.
  
  "Neeyillai endraal"..."un uravillai endral"
  
  It's a good sugestion.however,I like number of words as less as posible.with no less meaning.even if it's a single letter word.
  I don't know why it is right.but I know it is right.you know....like,I do feel it in me.
  
  I think Grammer is not that important to a kavithai,when the kavithai structure have the ability to convay the massage.
  
  If you remember the kavithai "AASAI"?
  @ the end,there would be a line goes like...
  "Orukkaalum unnai verukkaamal aasai"
  It's grammaticaly not correct.this line shouldn't end with the word 'aasai'.instead 'vendum'would be right.
  but 'aasai' is the only better word to fill both meaning and tone.
  note:you didn't ditect or mention this grammer mistake in that poem.
  
  Grammer:not nessesarily what a teacher teaches.
  there are more than one way of use of tamil languege among tamils arround the world.so,A grammer can not be in one way.
  If you can put a sentence in a wierd way,and still can give the msg.that is the grammer.
  
  "Oonam seithathenna"
  absolutly right.
  Thats excactly the word i used @ the first place.but changed it in to "ethanaal..." when i posted it here.considering "pinnaal..."
  
  
• From: Thinker (@ bangdp-33-28.mantraonline.com) on: Mon Apr 15 00:41:45
  
  Regarding grammer definition...
  
  Well... suits u...:) (I mean..ur wish!) (smiling)
  
  
  "ethanaal..." when i posted it here.considering "pinnaal...""<<
  
  yeah kool that sounds good too.
  
  
  "Sonnadillaiya?"
  
  Well I am a tamilian, I know it means "kooriyadillaiya?" or
  "pagandradillaiya?"
  
  Solvadu is "to say"
  Uraiyaduvadu is "to converse"
  
  A very mild diffence. Anyway the word is not wrong there. It suits there too.
  
  
• From: Thaya (@ 206-47-144-49.ip.tor.radiant.net) on: Mon Apr 15 11:45:11
  
  Regarding grammer definition...
  
  Well... suits u...:) (I mean..ur wish!)
  
  yeno theriyala...you sound like "naan pidivaathamaa nikkirathaala" solra ola irukku:)
  apdiyaa?
  
  what i ment was.....If I heartly think some think is better than i was told and think it is right...then I wont mind to a pioneer.
  
  you know "enakku naane neethipathi"
  laughing.
  
  

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