Topic started by Vatsyayana (@ 212.219.189.2) on Mon Jul 1 04:37:01 .
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Hello everyone. I've set up an erotica wesbite at the following address: http://www.geocities.com/kvatsyayana

It's an erotica website, not a pornographic one, which means I've tried to describe sex in a beautiful way, trying to describe the beauty of the human form. I've concentrated as much on the beauty of sex as on the physical sensations of it.

As of now, there's only one piece of work there. I shall be improving the website, with changes to the design and more work there, but I'd like you to visit the website and tell me what your opinion of the work is.

It's important that you give me feedback, I'm trying to improve the website, so even if you don't like the work, at least tell me how you think I can improve it. Reply either in this thread or email me at kvatsyayana@yahoo.com

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• From: Ravi (@ webport-cl6-cache1.ilford.mdip.bt.net) on: Tue Jul 2 19:09:53
  
  too long, so couldn't be bothered
  the brown back ground was questionable.
  you know there is aesthete too with eroticism
  
  
• From: Ravi (@ webport-cl6-cache1.ilford.mdip.bt.net) on: Tue Jul 2 19:10:18
  
  you know there is aesthete too with eroticism
  
  
• From: visu (@ 202.9.183.171) on: Tue Jul 2 22:48:17
  
  you have not mentioned abt the relationship between them. friends or unknown persons?
  
  
• From: Akash (@ 202.9.168.157) on: Wed Jul 3 07:50:43
  
  The website is good, but make it possible for others to submit their stories, and also for people to post their opinions on the site itself which can be read by everyone.
  About the story, it began well, but after the act started, it became a bit forced since the girl was completely passive.
  1. You did not mention what went through shilpi's mind.
  2. Shilpi did not have second thoughts, or any thoughts for that matter. Was she previously experienced? No mention. Was it her first time?
  3. No mention of Shilpi's feelings towards the other guy, or anything about that guy. Maybe you are planning a sequel with his story further on.
  
  It is a very good attempt and I wish you best of luck. I'll surely read your stories and contribute if possible
  
  
• From: nisala`s brother (@ 213.59.115.200) on: Wed Jul 3 10:01:42
  
  Nisala is a pervert,yesterday I saw him masturbating in front of a small boy.What a nonsense,is this guy normal or he needs some treatment.when we are young he tried to rape our sister,but she gave one super kick in his dingalingalings which nearly made him impotent.after some time he started reding all the dirty books whick he can get in colombo and continued his masturbationday and night.the problem is he reads it aloud in public places like parks and restaurents and wanks in front of people.
  
  
• From: Nisala (@ acab8a6c.ipt.aol.com) on: Sat Jul 6 17:51:03
  
  Vatsyayana,
  
  "First, I'm pleased that you got the impression of the Shilpa character almost exactly as I imagined her. She is very beautiful, and very feminine. I imagined her to be a woman who is really nice and friendly to everyone, does not know to be rude to others, likes to make friends, and mixes easily with men, almost oblivious of the fact that some men would want more than just friendship from women. She is very beautiful, but she is not the sort of woman whom men would at first consider "sexy" - her beauty and her femininity are of an almost divine kind."
  
  Very interesting.
  
  "her embarrassedness and her reactions show that he's bringing out the most womanly side of her. Note: she plays a completely passive role during their act of intercourse; she does not "ask for more" or groan or go "Yes! Yes! Yes!"; she enjoys it, but is relatively restrained herself."
  
  Here is where I disagree with you. I don't necessarily see embarrasment and passivity as being necessarily feminine. However, in the story Shilpa did not seem overly embarrassed or passive- it was just her first time. I would say for both men and women, the first time is always awkward, and that passivity for either is not unusual.
  
  Many guys see self-confidence in women. Many ladies I've known have also been attracted to shy guys.
  
  "I originally intended to show Rocco having to intelligently seduce her, I intended that he would have to praise her beauty almost poetically and slowly"
  
  The problem is that sailors are generally not intelligent and most don't know any poetry!! That's why I grimaced at the thought of someone like Shilpa falling for a sailor.
  
  It may be only me, but I don't find men seducing women to be very arousing (probably because I'm a guy!). Women may be able to smell fear in a man, but they can never smell the BS. Most guys know this, and that is why we all groan when we see a girl fall for an ugly, stupid jerk who is able to put on a very good act. If seducing a girl involves deceiving her somehow, then I'm not really sure if I could go for that.
  
  I would agree with what Fridge said about how the female lover MUST somehow in the story consent to having sex. I'm sure many women would find it demeaning if it wasn't presented that the female lover chose to make love with the guy. Some guys however think it's great to control a gal- to be able to make out without her choosing it. I guess I'm not one of those guys.
  
  "Also, another key question is, would you guys visit the website again?"
  
  Sure, why not?
  
  
  
  
• From: Vatsyayana (@ acba4b18.ipt.aol.com) on: Sat Aug 24 11:56:59
  
  Hello folks... I'm back after a seven-week absence... I've been travelling...
  
  I'm just writing to say the following things:
  
  1. You've probably noticed that the website hasn't been updated for quite a while. This is because I haven't had the time to do so. I'm going to be quite busy until at least December, so it's probably going to be until then before update it.
  
  2. I'd like to thank all those who have provided me with feedback. So far, most people seem to think "Tidying Up" is okay, but that I could do even better.
  
  Thanks, especially for providing me with feedback even if you didn't think it was very good.
  
  3. I'd like to ask EVERY SINGLE VISITOR to the website to provide me with feedback, pleeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaassssssssssssssssssssse! So far, I've had over a hundred visitors, but fewer than twenty have bothered to provide me with feedback!!!! Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaassssssssssssssssssssse EVERYONE, even if you think it's pathetic, say so, pleeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaassssssssssssssssssssse!
  
  4. Can I ask, how many of you here would encourage me to keep writing?
  
  Thanks. Bye for now.
  K Vatsyayana.
  
  
• From: Anesh Ganason (@ 210.187.156.84) on: Wed Sep 4 09:32:35
  
  Continue man with your work.
  It is quite interesting to look at work that people like you have come up with.
  We hd enough of the normal goodie too-shues so keep on writing nd hep us enjoy your work more
  
  
• From: Kanthavelu Nadarasan (@ edtntnt7-port-138.dial.telus.net) on: Wed Sep 4 19:54:32
  
  What?!? Nothing was on the site! No nothing at all! What happened?
  
  
• From: KVatsyayana (@ acb709c9.ipt.aol.com) on: Sat Sep 14 09:57:22
  
  Visu, what did you mean by your comment "U excelled Sarojadevi..."?
  
  
• From: KVatsyayana (@ acb4dd8b.ipt.aol.com) on: Mon Sep 16 10:06:19
  
  

          Hello everyone,

  
  

          I'm sorry, but I've decided to take down my erotica website.

  
  

          If you've got anything to say about this, please either email
  kvatsyayana@yahoo.com or
  say it here - in this forum.

  
  
  
  
  

  
  
  
  

  
  

          Regards,

  
  

          KVatsyayana (xieeyor vptti[y !!!!FAILURE!!!!)

  
  
• From: Dude (@ cache-loh-aa07.proxy.aol.com) on: Tue Sep 9 04:50:22
  
  Hey Nisala, how old are you? And Ms Fridge, you too?
  
  
• From: TEst (@ medsc423.bham.ac.uk) on: Thu Sep 16 00:51:29
  
  TEst
  
  
• From: Vatsyayana_fan (@ medsc423.bham.ac.uk) on: Thu Sep 16 00:53:20 EDT 2004
  
  Well, check this out... seems to be a reworking of the original "Tidying Up" story... if any of you remember... seems a little better...
  http://www.geocities.com/kvatsyayana2
  
  
• From: test (@ trc-1-50.bham.ac.uk) on: Thu Sep 16 06:11:01 EDT 2004
  
  test
  
  

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