Topic started by Abiramee (@ 202.188.127.2) on Tue Apr 23 22:28:53 .
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kalgal illaiyel,
salaigal thevaiillai,
kanngal illaiyel,
kalai maalai thevaiillai,
kathal illaiyel,
kavithaigal thevaiilai,
ullam illaiyel,
unarvugal thevaiillai,..

nimmithiyana valkai manithanuke enmathiyai tharum...
thunbamana valkai manithaneke thuyarathai tharum....
vinnaiparpavan valkaiyil uyarapparkiran...
mannaiparpavan valkaiyil marayaparkiran..

un inbamana mugathai parthen en thunba mugavariyai maranthen........


visum puyaleke uruvam illai
nee pesum tamiluke urakam illai...


by
gana

Responses:

• From: Abiramee (@ 202.188.127.2) on: Tue Apr 23 22:30:31
  
  Hope to hear comment about this poems especially from thinker,kuran and thaya.
  
  
• From: Thinker (@ bangdp-40-238.mantraonline.com) on: Wed Apr 24 06:40:58
  
  Abhirami,
  
  Well, you invited it urself!
  
  (Grinning) . I am a lil blunt critic. Not harsh though....so here it goes...
  
  "kalgal illaiyel,
  salaigal thevaiillai,
  kanngal illaiyel,
  kalai maalai thevaiillai,
  kathal illaiyel,
  kavithaigal thevaiilai,
  ullam illaiyel,
  unarvugal thevaiillai,.."<<<<<<<
  
  Madam, see there is no correlation between the above paragraph and the rest
  of the poem. It does not suit the topic. It has no value here in this poem.
  It does not add to the beauty or substance of the poem.
  
  Or is it that u are tryign to say....
  kalgal, kangal, kathal, ullam etc are great n simple things in life?? (vaazhkai)
  If yes, its not convyed well.
  
  
  
  "nimmithiyana valkai manithanuke enmathiyai tharum...
  thunbamana valkai manithaneke thuyarathai tharum...."<<<<<
  
  Nalla varigal taan, anaal you could have tried to be lil more poetic there.
  It is more like vasanam rather than kavidai.
  
  "vinnaiparpavan valkaiyil uyarapparkiran...
  mannaiparpavan valkaiyil marayaparkiran.. "<<<<
  
  Wow! Very nice. Esp mannai parpavan maraya parkiran...very true.
  
  
  "un inbamana mugathai parthen en thunba mugavariyai maranthen........
  
  visum puyaleke uruvam illai
  nee pesum tamiluke urakam illai... "<<<<
  
  
  Very poetic. I liked those words. Nalla karpanai.
  
  Abirami, try writing more. You have talent.
  
  :)
  
  Oh yeah abhirami,
  
  You have a nice name, and there are beautiful songs on ur name
  
  1. Abhiramiye uma maheshwari, shivagamiye kala dayanidi...
  2. Abhiramiye taaalatum samiye naaan dane teriyuma??
  3. Solladi Abhirami!
  
  :)
  ciao
  
  
• From: Thaya (@ 192.30.226.29) on: Wed Apr 24 19:36:33
  
  Thinker'aa kokkaa?LOL.
  
  anyway...I will write here tomorow ok:)
  I gotta Practice to go.
  
  
• From: Iyappan (@ lan-202-144-73-10.maa.sify.net) on: Thu Apr 25 08:14:19
  
  Nalla ezhudhi irukkinga.. as mr Thinker told there is no co-relation between first and second.. Irandu theevugalaga ulladhu..
  varthayal nandraga vilayadi irukkinga.. aanalum satre thadumatram
  Muyarchikku Vazhtukkal. Ungalal nichcyam nalla kavithaigal padaikka mudiyum endra nambikkai ulladhu.. thodarungal.
  
  Anbudan iya
  
  
• From: Abiramee (@ 202.188.127.2) on: Thu Apr 25 21:58:10
  
  Thank thinker and iyappan.
  yah i guess i need to do more practice.Yah i know thinker there is song on ym name in guna pic. I like it.Ok then thank for ur advice. Will see u back in my next poem.
  
  
• From: Thaya (@ toronto-ppp3537608.sympatico.ca) on: Fri Apr 26 21:54:18
  
  
  Hi Abi....Thinker and Aiyappan have said their coments and i have very similer too.
  
  hey,I wanna add one my self.....
  I know you have a great apatite for kavithai,and you will write good kavithaihal.
  
  go on.
  :)
  
  
• From: Puthirana punnagai (@ ) on: Sat Feb 28 23:09:53
  
  kavithai enbathu nenjam kanathalum kangal rasitalum varuvathu.. atan ul artam elutiya penavukke puriyum.. engo paditirukiren.. " kodi iruthil nan kirukkiyathu,, kodi velicatil ulagam paditida ul artam purintidumo".. abiramee, just remember.. poets no need any comments from others.. just ask ur heart 2 make the justice.. what ur heart comment, is the best for u.. kaviyarasukku avar kavithai mel santegam pirantiruntal kaviyarasu endra pattam avrukillamal poyirukum, ulagam avarai kavipulavarai varnikka avarin mothal aayutam, avar nambillai..dont lost it..
  
  
  
• From: Puthirana punnagai (@ 210.195.165.29) on: Sat Feb 28 23:11:59 EST 2004
  
  kavithai enbathu nenjam kanathalum kangal rasitalum varuvathu.. atan ul artam elutiya penavukke puriyum.. engo paditirukiren.. " kodi iruthil nan kirukkiyathu,, kodi velicatil ulagam paditida ul artam purintidumo".. abiramee, just remember.. poets no need any comments from others.. just ask ur heart 2 make the justice.. what ur heart comment, is the best for u.. kaviyarasukku avar kavithai mel santegam pirantiruntal kaviyarasu endra pattam avrukillamal poyirukum, ulagam avarai kavipulavarai varnikka avarin muthal aayutam, avar nambikkai..dont lost it..
  
  
  
• From: ratchasan (@ 203-195-203-203.now-india.net.in) on: Sun Feb 29 09:36:16 EST 2004
  
  thooooooooooo
  
  ratchasan
  
  
• From: Anand (@ 210.187.84.130) on: Sun Feb 29 21:29:04 EST 2004
  
  Abi,
  kavithaigalukuu solvarighalin azhutthame azhaghu...
  kalladiyum vizhum....
  anaagareegamaana vimarsananggalum varum....
  thayanggaaamal ezhthunggal.....
  unggal kavithaiyum zhagaaga malarum...
  unggalin peyaraipolave.
  Anbudan
  Anand
  
  

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